Griffinkeeper

Poor Imps. *Sniggers* By spirits, do you refer to demons and the like? If so, then I agree with that idea. It could be that these spirits are using the ...

Alden landed at the foot of a great cave. Quietly, he tiptoed into the cave, when he heard a loud snoring. This is the right place all right, Alden thought. ...

Third Page Summary The introductions finish. The group leaves Valiant. They decide to take a less common road to avoid cheering people. Alden discovers Hooper and some other thieves. He ...

Well, I like it better than this one, but, 1. I don't think Valin would be one to run 2. I don't like the fact that the old ways are ...

I'm moving Alden to pick up Ursa for the story. I think that the thieves should attack within that hour my character is gone. That way, they'll be suspicious of ...

Alden's primary vision is his best. His night vision is simply staring at a section of forest and then looking for movement. Valin has the night vision. Alden would be ...

Learning something = growth. Doing the same thing over and over and over... = dead. I don't think this plot is really decent at all, I don't think that it ...

Inactive characters become NPC's. Killing off characters is frowned upon, since people can disappear for days, weeks, and months. Trust me, it happens. I'd rather have the character continue as ...

Not good, a character that doesn't grow is a stagnant character. Stagnant characters aren't good because they don't create any conflict. How about this for Seraph? Seraph been doing the ...

Everyone took the left fork. Alden took flight and flew above the heroes. A forest was up ahead. Far ahead, a flock of birds suddenly came up from the canopy. ...

A story can not possibly succeed if the characters are boring. So, let's avoid boring characters. We can avoid them by figuring out how our characters grow, where they are ...

As to which fork in the road do we take: I'm thinking that we could either take the Left fork, maybe rescue some straggling pioneers who are being ambushed by ...

The other heroes all answered in the affirmative. Valin and Seraph seemed skeptical. Still, Alden was glad to be out of the throne room. He was impatient for the adventure ...

Second Page Summary The heroes met the King. Things got tense when Valin wouldn't bow to the King, but Seraph managed to calm things down. Check the second page for ...

When the introductions had finished, the King rose. "Eight great heroes inhabit this hall. Each with wisdom, strength, and power. The task ahead of you will require all of these ...