Griffinkeeper

Some comments: 1. Silver pistol. Silver isn't common in guns for a very good reason: silver tarnishes fairly easily. Shiny weapons are also a great way to get someone's attention, ...

Woohoo!

"Lead on Mr. Tamar," Hall said after he had gotten back on to his horse. He took Desmond at his word, a highway robber would have no reason to keep ...

Night has fallen. The canvas panels in the tower above me are painted red with light. The cathedral-like space becomes almost a joke—all I see is black, white and red. ...

His name was Lt. Benjamin Hall and at that moment, he was riding south in search of Captain Casion. The Captain had been late in reporting in, but the war ...

My character is kind of hanging out in the opening right now, since I need you guys to arrive at the base before I can introduce my character. Maybe you ...

New character, will meet with the others at the Von Clarif's camp. Name: Lieutenant Benjamin Hall (CE) Age: 26 Gender: Male Region: Altridge Appearance: 5'11", short brown hair, grey eyes, ...

You should remove the prologue. If there is anything you wrote there that you can't bear to live without, then you can incorporate it in Chapter One. The reason why ...

Excalibur, your post going on about how shooting games make a person a killing machine is precisely the problem... People don't become killing machines by playing video games. Soldiers do ...

Jane came charging in to Marcus’s room at eight in the morning. He woke up because of her voice, but he couldn’t yet comprehend what she was saying. He looked ...

Video Link here. In a recent speech to high school students, President Obama mentioned YWS. Where you are right now doesn’t have to determine where you’ll end up. No one’s ...

Wouldn't her femininity have been known from birth? Guys have external equipment; the lack of which would be a dead give away that the baby was a baby girl. People ...

Enjoy. -Grif.

The introduction was rather experimental and in this case it didn't really work out. What broke it was the narrator. The narrator took way too much time to get to ...

What sort of improvements can we expect to see from the new chat?