Griffinkeeper

I can't remember the last time I enjoyed reading something as much as this. You've definitely put a lot of thought in how the reader sees the story and I ...

Welcome to YWS! I'm Grif and I'll be reviewing your poem today. I could see the potential intensity of the poem, but it didn't seem to come out very well. ...

Welcome to YWS! The first thing that struck me was how long this was. YWS recently added a novel feature where you could make a novel. You can post your ...

Cirque, I've updated my story to reflect your comments. It was most helpful.

I spent a lot of time in chat conducting research. I even had Squalls ban me from chat temporarily; but I decided against using that scene. As for your dialogue, ...

As a thunderstorm stampedes across a plain, making flashy displays and shouting in a booming voice, so now Grif approached the chat room, swearing oaths and obscenities that would cause ...

Somehow, this story just doesn't seem all that interesting. It seems to be running the well trodden path of the senior year tale. All the characters seem to confirm the ...

Let me get this straight: "The story is about a horny young man, who after spending twenty two years in cryo, gets to start a colony with eleven other people, ...

This story is very hard to follow. As I read the story, I began to ask myself questions like "Where are the quotation marks?" and "What a weird format." Finally ...

The SPEW Eevee was a SPEW Frigate. Painted as it was in bright pink paint, it was the second most recent ship in the SPEW arsenal. Weapon pods were hidden ...

*coughs* And, uh, where am I? Probably in some other portion of the story. The story tends to involve members I'm more familiar with, because I can exaggerate their characters ...

Hey Adam! 3-D art is good. I'll try to include more physical descriptions of the ships in the next chapter, or the chapter after. Whenever they get back to the ...

1200 Hours April 5th, 25 AS SPEW Docks YWS Station After two years of construction, the SPEW Gryphon III was ready to be launched from the docks. A massive crowd ...

Things were busy at Marlon's house. Asele had taken care of Eli and had returned. The rug that held his vomit had been whisked away by Mrs. Ashbury and she ...

Don't Wyverns usually have two legs?