Griffinkeeper

This is just disgusting... Seriously? 35 reviews in a single day? How are we supposed to beat her?

*Moved to Randomness*

I rather like this. It is very much like Shakespeare. It is very efficient, no wasted lines. I wish I had more to say about it.

"Stop," Aloysius said. Hespher immediately stopped. "Stay here and stay alert. I'll go check it out," Aloysius said. The other rangers had stopped and had begun arguing. "You couldn't see ...

I think it would be more interesting if they find nothing at all. Give them that sense of being hunted, without any of the fighting.

Ahead of the others rode Aloysius and his apprentice, Hespher. "They're quite a merry bunch aren't they?" Aloysius asked. He spoke softly, as was his custom. Hespher tensed though, she ...

I'm a bit unfamiliar with the series. What do we know about the cultures of each of these countries?

Name: Aloysius "Al" Yates Age: 25 Gender: Male Role (Ranger, Ranger's Apprentice, or Apprentice Warrior): Ranger Weapons: Standard Ranger gear, grappling hook. Appearance: Kind of like Steve McQueen P

It doesn't seem to work well. There is plenty of nice imagery, but they don't seem to connect to tell a story. Twenty two more feet up, Is the top ...

Welcome to YWS Captain Random! The poem has turned into a blob of text, that makes it difficult to read and even harder to critique. Most critiques involve looking at ...

It seems disharmonious somehow. The lines rhymed, but they didn't seem to flow. i wrapped my world around you and you always stuck with me Through the good times and ...

This poem is much too short and way too weak. I think it boils down to a lack of character development. There is nothing in the ten lines that really ...

Trenton and I left as was informed, dark. Um... what? I t had been several hours since I first met Trenton , and I was trusting him to lead me ...

This poem came off flat. It is lacking that sense of awe, that boundless wonder that accompanies a visit to something breath-taking. It helps if you have been to a ...

As promised, I came back for more. Usually chapters describe a particular event, but it seems like chapter two is doing the same thing that chapter one is, so perhaps ...