Griffinkeeper

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In the short term, there will be less attacks on the United States and her allies. By killing a key leader and grabbing lots of information on the Al Quada, ...

Welcome to YWS! It's very nice to see a new member fall in love with YWS and then write poetry about it. It's very humbling. There is a minor thing: ...

Welcome to YWS! I'm Griffinkeeper, one of the many helpful Moderators here on YWS. If you have any trouble or questions, just let me know and I'll help. Have you ...

I rather like the way that the Wyvern took over the village. Instead of the cliche fire and terror, it hypnotized the villagers. As a result, the premise was interesting. ...

It's a pleasure to welcome you to the site at long last! I write fan-fictions too, but they're about the various characters we have here on YWS! It's in the ...

Deep Space SPEW Gryphon Grif Grif stood in the hanger with a very unhappy look on his face, standing nearby was Isha. Their mission had been delayed for three hours ...

I rather liked this. It was coherent and even though I haven't read the first three chapters, it was nonetheless easy to read. The only part that really confused me ...

Hello, I'm Grif! Let's dive right into the critique. Exhausted, I wait for the plane from my home to the New World to land. It is still dark outside, my ...

Forward Observation Post SPEW Gryphon Grif The door opened and Isha stepped onto the bridge. Her pirates were aboard and finding their quarters. Isha, on the other hand, had other ...

It had taken longer than Marlon would have liked, but they were finally underway. The group was tense; although Marlon did his best not to show it. The group traveled ...

Deep Space SPEW Gryphon Grif The Gryphon dropped out of hyperspace. "The area is clear," Adelaide said. "Go ahead and begin deploying the sensor arrays," Grif said. The sensor arrays ...

I didn't like the letter. 1. The letter was too short. Back in the day, letters would be a lot longer. The letter read more like an e-mail than it ...

The poem is more of a rant than anything else. There's nothing really wrong with that either. There is, however, a lot of repetition; which could be trimmed down. The ...

1) The storybook isn't considered dead if it is in this forum. Dead storybooks are in the Storybook Archives. 2) You are absolutely welcome to join and bring new life ...