Griffinkeeper

~Sira Ha'dra~ The night air was warm, which was not bad at all. The extra water seemed to make the temperature variation less. I looked lazily out to the east. ...

~Thaden Ma'lar~ I noticed that the service of the inn, since my arrival, had become more efficent. Within minutes, I had three plates full of meat in front of me ...

~Thaden Ma'lar~ We walked down the street. "Driz and Lireal should have accomadations for us by now." "Say, where do you think the Inn is?" Alex asked. Suddenly, two people ...

It doesn't seem very fluid.

~Thaden Ma'lar~ I entered the shop. Alex immediately started looking around, hopefully keeping an eye out for any items that might come in handy. "I need four days provisions for ...

~Thaden Ma'lar~ It was getting dark as we rolled into the first town. On the edge of the forest, it was barricaded well. Signs of past fighting had yet to ...

This is full of spelling and grammatical errors. You should fix these errors before continuing.

~Thaden Ma'lar~ As I watched Driznarden's face light up, I smiled. Well, only a matter of time before they leave us on our merry way. I frowned as I noticed ...

Isn't it funny how my best ideas are always the last ones I write?

~Thaden Ma'lar~ I landed nearby. I saw Driznarden and Croak pull the Female Dark Elf out of the stream. While they did this, I related to Seraph what I saw. ...

~Thaden Ma'lar~ The air felt good. I kept a sharp eye out for Sira, but she was nowhere to be seen. I looked down at the road. It split in ...

War and Peace is one.

Honest to god, it's pure genius. No one ever puts the out-takes at the end of videos, and they should. Good work. EDIT: I'm going to put this in the ...

SRH16, use the Writing Tips forum to get the help you need.

Very bad descriptions. No reference to where the protagonist is, what he is doing, basic things that are necessary to give readers a picture of what is happening. The few ...