Griffinkeeper

You shouldn't wait to build character, you should do it quickly through nuances, words, and actions. The actions seemed fluid enough, which is a good thing. Here is my big ...

Make sure you check out the rules and FAQ's, this will make it much easier. I suggest you give advice (aka critiques) to writers in the literary forums, this is ...

I've been to a catillion before. Those are really cool.

This thread is no longer a literary work, but a political discussion. I'm going to move this to the Debate and Serious Discussion Usergroup. If you wish to join the ...

Very informative. That's what happens when Stinkoman teaches grammar. (...) "DOT DOT DOT!" 20X6!

Pain. Somehow, this seems to describe my reaction to the angst poured all over my screen. Backgroundbob is right; the subject and topic in general is somewhat cliched. The more ...

Those arent artists, those are 3d modelers. Judging by the sharp angles Id say they're relatively low poly. (Poly = polygons, faces & triangles, which make up the 3d model) ...

Ah, so what is TA? TA stands for Total Annihlation, a really old video game that came out during 1995. It is still a lot of time to play and ...

The member of the week is Smaur! Three words why: 9 Page Critique.

I wish I could have a junior year of high school. A junior year of college really blows. Anyways, welcome to YWS! Make sure to check the FAQ's, they actually ...

Alright, instead of a real writing critique, I'm going to critique your characters. For one, they are all completely unbalanced and all of them look like they're stock characters. Folkner, ...

Nicely done.

I think this is really cool. Kind of a confusing imagery, but it worked out after a little thought. Nice to have poems which make you think, versus decoding.

No spelling errors. Okay, I'll stop now.

You read the FAQ! *Gasps in shock* You're my favorite newbie. Honestly, almost no one reads the FAQ's, but you did! *Tips hat*