Griffinkeeper

I think a total ban of smoking would have as much a chance of succeeding as a total ban on alcohol would. That is, it wouldn't at all. The only ...

Alden tore the goblins off of Henry. An arrow appeared in one of them, Alden raked the remaining one with his talons. Henry was bleeding badly. "It's going to be ...

(Go ahead and sleep it off Sab. Valin and Co. took out the goblins on the perimeter with arrows, so they should join the battle momentarily. On a side note, ...

The axe and blade clashed together. The priest sent Cyrus flying around the ring again. Cyrus threw an axe, but the priest dodged it, it killed the goblin behind him ...

"Sirloaz, Tan'quin, search the bodies for anything useful. I must heal myself. Alden, do what you will with those that aren't useful," Valin said. Alden grabbed a bag from a ...

Neato! I like how you incorporated things that can be seen on a daily basis, like the electronic message board. I'm not one to hand out a 'Great job; keep ...

Still, it is unsettling that that Iraq did not rid itself of supression without foreign invasion. Sometimes, the people need help. The people could not rid themselves of Saddam in ...

What a boring story. This mage wants a kingdom, so he just kills the duke and inherits it. No real struggle, no real difficulty. Where is the drama? Where is ...

Welcome to the site Flem. I'm Griffinkeeper, one of the many helpful mods that roam the forums like nomads. Most people just call me Grif. It sounds like you're really ...

Soy un moderadoro tambien! Me llamo Griffinkeeper. Hablo ingles y español. No hablas en "leet" cuando estas en YWS, tenemos una "chat room" para esto idioma. Bienvenido a YWS, lees ...

Welcome! Just a quick reminder! Read the rules and follow the two critiques to one submission rule. Any questions or problems? Just send me or any member of big brother ...

First, this needs a PG-13 rating. Second, this doesn't look like it belongs in Fantasy Fiction, it seems more like a sci-fi.

Welcome to YWS! I'm one of the friendly moderators here on YWS. Just make sure to read the rules, particularly the one about two critiques per literary submission. If you ...

It's been dead for quite a while.

Wow, a gigantic slug of purple prose. Let me see if I can help you improve this. I took your post, and edited it. Here's my version. The last [s]slithers[/s] ...