Griffinkeeper

Here are my thoughts on abortion: 1. Time doesn't matter. It is generally agreed that if one does not terminate the pregnancy, then the result will be a live human ...

1. Write something else and put it on YWS. 2. Work on story until someone comments. 3. Repeat.

Boring. 60 seconds I'll never get back. You can at least pride yourself on the fact that it is written well enough to read :) So you thought it was ...

Thank you both. I'll be revising this to reflect your comments.

There were a few flaws with the story that weren't very clearly explained. She didn't see the handsome stranger when she entered, nor did she hear him enter. Also, the ...

“Yep,” he said simply as he ushered me into the classroom where I saw Brandon was already there. This should be split into two sentences. The word "simply" isn't necessary ...

I'm rusty and out of practice. I need this to be brutalized. Blatant cheer leading will be promptly ignored. The hill was steep. Alden could have flown to the top ...

The training began immediately. It would not be easy, many of the Marines had not been through a training session in some months. They would need to not just reach ...

"AHH!" an alien screamed as it was mowed down by gun-fire. Grif moved through the recently cleared corridor, carefully checking for threats and movement. He moved into another corridor and ...

I'm inclined to think of homosexuality to be the result of some experience. Animals tend to adapt so as to survive in a certain manner. Part of this is procreating. ...

Please post two reviews before you submit a piece of work. This way, everyone gets a review. It all began in New York City. Krista lived in the Park Ave. ...

I couldn't get into the present tense at all. Stories are usually told after the fact, so why are you using the present tense instead of the past tense? I ...

"Must... stay... awake!" Grif yelled. Piercing the drowsiness, he activated an adrenaline rush. It took a few seconds for it to take effect. Up in the saucer he was aware ...

"D'you think there's a way to make it so you can't log in anymore? Or is that Nate's territory?" "Adelaide runs the website. If we can get to her, we ...

Let's move past the card game, it really isn't contributing much to the forward movement of the story.