Greyjoy

This was well written. The dialog was great, as Brian said. Only thing I'd suggest is try and form a plot, perhaps, and keep going.

bald

i posted this before, and receieved some feedback, and changed it a little. i'd like to know what you all think, perhaps a little lengthy. Issys took the glass from ...

This is a very short introduction, but I find it to be lacking somehow, perhaps I should lengthen it. Any advice would be appreciated. Issys took the glass from the ...