GrenadeCatcher

Even though the sun was shining brightly, Saraphina shivered. She felt naked, broken and out of place. She ignored the glances she was getting and kept her eyes set on ...

Why not try putting space on your next chapters, but good start. I write all of my things on Microsoft Word first then copy and paste them here, which automatically ...

Oooh I didn't even want to read this... I couldn't get past the boring cliche opening! Don't take it personally, but "hi my name is..." does NOT grab my attention ...

“Come out; come out, where ever you are Calipso. I don’t bite… much.” He crackled. So this is talking, and when you have a new line of talking you need ...

Yes I realize it's really short but adding anything more would ruin the effect. Tear it to shreds please!!!XD P.s. if you have any suggestions to a new name please ...

Hi! So this will be hard to criticize since your brother is only ten, but I'll give it a shot. Sorry if I'm too hard on ya'! ESCAPE FROM THE ...

Hello. Here as requested. I will be blunt and say I only read the first two paragraphs, plus a sentence. I didn't want the review to be too long. To ...

I think this is a good story so far, but why does he have a Russian accent if he's American? Make sure you capitalize the first word in every sentence! ...

“They’re gonna get you too! I’m not crazy! Don’t trust him!” screamed Zachary as he was loaded into a van. Can you believe it? Zach thought that He was going ...

The long grass around me waves slightly in the wind. I imagine that from above it looks like rippling water, but laying in it they just looked like stalks of ...

Thanks! For whatever reason when I typed this up my computer kept saying soul was wrong so I assumed it was sole haha

Hi I'm GrenadeCatcher and I'm new to YWS! I only have seven lonley reviews and I'm hungry-no!- starving for reviews! I want to review your pieces! Quiero revisar su pieza! ...

Hi! I'm happy to be your first reviewer! First of all, I noticed that you put a -- before each ''. That isn't necisary! It actually bugs me, but so ...

Hi! I'm happy to be your first reviewer! First of all, I noticed that you put a -- before each ''. That isn't necisary! It actually bugs me, but so ...

Hi! I'm grenade Catcher :) Will you review my fantasy story? It's kinda creepyish. It's called the Haunting Hour (Or isabelle's Story, I'm not sure yet.) Hope you enjoy!