GreenFinchLinnetBird

Hello Amfliflier! This was an interesting piece, and I very much liked the bluntness of it. I was just a little confused about this part here: Acting on one thing ...

Hey theotherone! I just wanted to start out by saying that I enjoyed reading this. The grammar was good, for the most part, although I agree with the comments that ...

Edited since first two comments. Thanks so much for the suggestions! Still working on character and setting development. His eyes on me. That’s the first feeling I can remember. That ...

Hello FRAYEDjade! First of all, I love your verbs. Water droplets peppered, and midmorning glinted, and her fingers rejoiced, for example. Verbs like that are descriptive and fun to read. ...

6/10 I'm not sure if it's frightening or enlightening

Hello the doctor! Well this was quite an interesting script. I have a few questions though. First of all, I'm not sure where the two men you mention in the ...

Hello Syntheticman! I'd first like to commend you on your excellent grammar, which made your piece quite nice to read. On top of that, everything had a very good flow; ...

Hi everyone! I'm back, but under a new username because I haven't been on for two years. Two years, what was I thinking? :D Hopefully I will be able to ...