GreatEscape

I think that you shouldn't change the capital H in him when it pertains to God. I feel a little confused by this. Is it a story? I don't know ...

A tragedy indeed. I enjoyed reading this. The rhythm and the flow was good. I was never a fan of this kind of poetry but this was really well written ...

To me this poem sounded like a teenager venting to a friend more than a poem. It could have something to do with the flow or the way it is ...

I think the emotion of the poem conveys nicely. I like how you kept the theme of lighting going throughout the poem. I don't think the flow was quite right ...

Wow. I agree that this has potential. I'd say loads of it. I was intrigued and drawn into it. It leaves the reader thinking about what will happen next, what's ...