Gravity

The reason for the repetativeness was this; it really represents the slowness of someone who has woken up an hour ago, did not study and has to take a test. ...

sweet :)

I made revisions. hope you like it

sure.

This would be for a guy to say: "I'm like a rubix cube, the more you play with me, the harder I get," By the way, I laughed so hard ...

Awwww! Thanks. That means a lot. In all honesty, the movie insidious scared the crap out of me. I'm not sure how I came up with this. I already have ...

That's an awesome idea. Thanks

I see what you mean about the short and long sentences. It's actually annoying me. It's almost like I'm getting really into these descriptions and then...abrupt sentence. 3 of them ...

Thank you :)

Okay. I totally get where you're coming from on everything you've mentioned. So first, if you've noticed, throughout the whole story John's Dad remains quiet. John mentions and drops hints ...

thank you. I think I will revise it and put in a new stanza

lol, oops

yup. no prob :) @DarkKnight9

Thanks Joe. and no, my real name isn't defyingravity01, I just prefer to be anonymous on the internet :) The poem is about a boy that I had feelings for, ...

I did not write that Jack dies on the home page!!! @Blackwood Where was that?