Gravity

I see what you're talking about, but ultimately the rhythm is a stylistic choice and I think I'll keep it as well as the tense switch. I think the switch ...

thanks :)

thanks :)

okay that makes sense :)

I'm not trying to retract anything. I never post anything online that I'll regret. :)

Oh I wasn't calling you that. I was just saying if you are (which I wouldn't know), then you should at least try

Ah. That makes more sense. It's just that this piece is a metaphor so it seems like you're saying a writer needs a relationship to save them from themselves.

yup :)

Lol.

Well it worked and idk why you did that.

Omg I'm sorry, I didn't see that you wrote this story. Not sure what it was you commented though, it's confusing.

I think this has earned the courtesy of being called "The worst thing I've ever read on this site". No. You don't say that to a writer. We always struggle. ...

Can a mod please mark this as a review so I can get points for my team?

Considering I couldn't even read your review because it was so grammatically jacked up, you need to stop.

Thank you so much! That means a lot :) I'm glad you liked it and you saw the humor and irony.