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I really liked this one! I'm assuming the guy just had a really bad trip? It was a little confusing because at one point he was leaving the house, the ...

Well it was written well, I couldn't find anything to nit pick, but what confused me was the meeting of a celebrity. I think you should explain who he was ...

Hi there =D Even though this was quite short, and I mean short, I thought it said a lot. It says that our MC isn't like everyone and is possibly ...

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When it comes to my critique you caught the error, so no need and repeating that. As for the story over all, I liked it. It really pulled me and ...

It's good to see more of Jonah, it's been a while! Like Lava said this was quite a short chapter. I get that he's confused on his whereabouts, but I ...

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@Lava I keep getting the whole 'flirting thing is weird,' don't worry that's not a major part of the story, it's not like they're trying to date one another or ...

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Overall I liked it, it's a pretty good set up. I just wish I knew more about the MC, you didn't really give us a general description of the person, ...

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Yay chapter 2! There were a few mistakes, clack instead of clock, I think. And also, I feel as though dad should be capitalized when in first person, unless you're ...

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Awe I'm your first review thanx =) and yea this story is pretty out there with the ruthlessness of my two MCs. As far as the flirting goes....haha, I keep ...