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Great! We get a tad bit more about the mystery man (which is mostly just him being a lovable jerk and giving cryptic hints and statements), we get a snippet ...

I totally just squealed as soon as the mystery blue eyed man showed up. I think he may be my favourite character! Anyway, *cough* I must be professional. I did ...

This is my FAVOURITE chapter so far! Murder, mystery, murky waters, a surprise guest (praying that this certain stranger has some certain blue eyes!), and even some ice cream. Just ...

Is this chapter a bit shorter than the last two? It feels like it. Anyway, some things: I forgot to tell you, but I love the lines of poetry that ...

Can I just say that I loved this. It was emotionally engaging and intriging. Some critique: In the first paragraph, you say "vivid red lava". I think you should use ...

Once again, great! I like how this chapter slows the story down a little bit. Not slow as in boring, but slow as in a bit of a change in ...

Wow! I will definitely be reading more of this! Very interesting and mysterious. Here's some of the things I saw: The violin notes continued to play as Valarie tugged on ...