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How to Write Science-Fiction and Fantasy by Orson Scott Card, Story by Robert McKee ( Story is actually a book targeted from screenwriting, but it's applicable to writing novels, as ...

***UPDATE Okay, I'm back from art class, so I'll consumate the review. “Don’t shoot too high comma my brother! Eventually shooting stars burn out.” “Well done comma my Soaring Yeasa’s! ...

for she had told him many times she loved feeling of hair flying the feeling He felt, not scared in the least as he felt the wind rushing through his ...

To me, something like that more implies that he wasn't just shooting at a mirror, but shooting at his reflection in the mirror. As it stands now, he may have ...

My only suggestion is to give "the man" a name. I haven't read a story in which a viewpoint character was only refered to as "the man" or "the woman." ...

Wikipedia, actually. I searched for a list of writing communities, and I saw YWS listed. I checked out its page, and was interested, so I registered.

The narration was interesting and personal, like Adam stated, and you've apparently got the world well drawn out. I would have made the piece a little bit longer, but that ...

Caroline’s glass flew through the air, crashing into the TV. She was in a very bad mood at the moment Obviously. She had had what she called a “snotty” customer ...

but more than anything Michael knew it was that she was afraid of someone carrying . Delilah couldn’t understand why anyone would care. caring That's the only mistake I found ...

I thought the piece was really creative, and the premise was intriguing. It's something that I could see happening. You didn't need to describe anything; your dialogue was sufficient. I'd ...

Welcome to YWS, Nariel.

Welcome to the site! I'm fairly new here, myself. I've enjoyed it immensely, so far.

Welcome to YWS! You should fit in here, since you seem to be a natural writer. Remember that you need to write two reviews before submitting your own work. Enjoy ...

Thanks, Amelia :) I might just employ that technique you just showed me. I don't know how many draft's I'm gonna write, but if I don't submit it until I'm ...