GoldenQuill

.:EDITED SUNDAY, MAY 17TH, 2009 AT 8:50 PM:.

Chapter Four Notch’s News “Vanessa?” Sheanna was the first to force words out of her mouth. “Sheanna?” The two stood there, eyes wide and locked on each other. “ You’re ...

8. Ooh. Caught my eye. Techincally this is three, but... Sheanna let her beautiful, light blue eyes wander around. There was a light fog over the ground, but only because ...

HELLO EVERYONE! In English class we had to do this; it was so fun, I decided to post it up. This is a little how your story will be formated: ...

KEY: Cross out-Probelm Bold-Correction Red-What The Probelm Was The tale Of Desperaux takes place in the middle ages, inside of a castle. The main character is a mouse, named Desperaux. ...

I know what an is used for, thank you very much. 'An' is instead of 'a'; you use it before words that start with a vowel. But... I've seen it ...

Let me tear apart this and fix all the grammar issuses I saw: I tossed the last head of lettuce into the plastic bowl next to me and hopped up ...

I read it over and over again, desperate to find at least one mistake; but I couldn't. Everything seemed perfect, flawless. And then the cliffhanger at the end! That was ...

I'm sorry; I unforunately didn't have time to read the second part, just the first. You had tons of grammar mistakes, but I kept on forgetting them as I read ...

Chapter Three Princesses of the West “Where are we?” Sheanna’s voice shook so much it alarmed herself and she put her hand over her mouth again, this time not removing ...

Well. Pretty much everyone caught my mistakes. x[} But I did enjoy that. I liked the way you describe and the suspence and what-not. But what I don't understand is ...

Wow. That's really scary. Can I say I enjoyed a peice about someone with an awful disease? I liked how you worded everything, described how you felt. It really made ...

Hello there! I read through it, and other than a few grammar mistakes [like, you should of put a comma there, or should of put a question mark here, or ...

It was pretty good; but I couldn't finish reading it, because I kept on finding a few mistakes that bugged me. “Mom look I can take care of my self. ...

IT'S HOBBS! Cool. ^.^ I haven't read the Deathly Hallows, but I know everything that happens because my friend spoiled it. xP