GoldenQuill

Name: Davik Dellicom (Dave) Gender: Male Appearance: Very tall. Long, black hair that comes to shoulders and circular glasses. Slightly muscular. Personality: He may seem dark and rude, but inside ...

Hey there! =[} NITPICKING TIME! xP consisted of her bed, her dresser, and a bookcase. It wasn’t very big, but It was a cozy, and a little place for Kerry ...

Hey! I'm Aushy, and I'll be reviewing your story today. Little nit-pick: I turn to look at my timer. “Great job sweetie! You were awesome!” She says, but I don’t ...

Chapter Seven ‘Music by the Fireside’ The sound of the horses’ hooves echoed off the trees and rang in Sheanna’s ears even after the horses stopped walking. Sheanna was so ...

*pops in* 'Ello! I'd like to review your story. =} David had, against his better judgment, gone through the drive-through window to order his strawberry milkshake. There was something markedly ...

Hey there. I'm Aushy, and I'll be reviewing your poem today. I really enjoyed that. You certainly have a way with words. But certaintly you didn't post this up just ...

This is a nice comic--funny, too--but kind of boring. It didn't really stand out or catch my eye. Perhaps that's only because it's pencialed in. Perhaps color it in? That ...

CONGRATULATIONS EVI! =[} Yay for young featured members.

Welcome Rosalie! I love new members! I was one like, not too long ago. x[} Anyway. You've gotten the rules and what-not. But everyone forgot about the most important rule... ...

Chapter Six ‘Childhood Friends’ Sheanna was surprised to find that Sedare was a very good listener. He said not a word the entire time she told her story, and he ...

NITPICK! Look up from the blanket was the cutest little boy I had ever seen. Perhaps 'looking'? new, baby brother Why do we have a comma here? I'm on the ...

There were tons of grammar mistakes, but not that major and you'll probably catch them. There was one thing I didn't like how you explained: “Eggshells?” she repeated, as if ...

Hello hello hello! I'm Aushy, and I shall be critiquing your story today. Other than a few grammar probelms (which were so minor I'm not even going to call you ...

Hello there! Wow. That was really powerful. I love that, it's completely honest and true. That was great; I hope it gets recongized by someone important and we're singing it ...

Chapter Five I’m Coming With You Sheanna woke after a good night’s sleep; well, a good night’s sleep considering the day she had had before it. Sheanna yawned and stretched. ...