GoldenQuill

Hallo Ben. I'm Aushy, and I'll be critiquing your work today. :} Alright, so, here's my nitpicks. "food", That should be "food," . I know, I thought it was that ...

Hallo. I'm Aushy, and I'll be critiquing your story. :} Let's get right down to it. I know how hard it is to keep in a 1,500 word limit. I ...

Hallo. I am Aushy, and I shall be critiquing your work today. :} It was very nice, your story was. The only thing that slightly confused me was the thing ...

That was good. It was really good, I must admit. You didn't explain your surroundings enough. While it did all make sense, I didn't really didn't get a feel for ...

Woah. Woah. Woooooah. That was so FAST! When people read stories, they like to get into the story, feel what the character does, look through the character's eyes. Unforunately, you ...

I really did enjoy that. Honestly, I did. I only found one problem, and it sort of bothered me. In some places, you were much too fast. For example, we ...

The way the sunlight filtered through the trees of the dense forest was curious to the boy. It seemed to suggest that it was such a perfect morning, nothing could ...

Hay sweetie. Sorry I didn't come earlier, for some reason I couldn't find the link to this story. :O Anyway... This was a very good chapter. I did enjoy it. ...

Thank you all for your lovely reviews. :} I know it was confusing, which is very unusual for me, but I got a little carried away in the description. Hehehehe. ...

(I cannot decide a name, so for the time being, it shall be called 'Mistia'. Please enjoy and critique as hard as you can. I really need help with this ...

I'm here. :} Alright, so, here's my things. ^.^ It was very good, but I noticed a few things that kind of distracted me from the story the entire time. ...

Within bright green hills, with houses stationed on them as sure as there are words on this page, lay a clear, tranquil lake. The sun shined on it just so, ...

Sweetie, don't worry. :} I really enjoyed your edits. A few things that confused me now made sense. It was a lot clearer. You did a great clean-up of this. ...

Hay, I'm Aushy, and I shall be critiquing your story today. :} Cynthia was reading a book when her mum came in. Cynthia was a real book-worm. Although reading is ...

It's hard, and nearly impossible, to critique something when it really happened. I haven't done it before. First, I'm going to critique it as a piece, but then, I'll critique ...