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Re: Legend of The Scale, Chapter 1.1--Trako
Hey! I'm rusty on reviewing, so heads up, there'll be strangely-phrased phrasings in abundance. I love this. You've really established your style. Solid and fluid, which I don't suppose makes ...
May 12, 2014 -
Re: Vampiric: Book Two, Chapter Two
Back again! 'Course I had to arrive after two thorough reviews. :P Gosh, I'm intimidated by your writing. You've developed such a solid style and voice. It's worthy of publishing, ...
May 11, 2014 -
Re: The Long Weekend: Part 1.
Heya, Ben! Apologies for the delay. I think this is a gorgeous premise for a short story. You established characters and a setting, and thus developed half the exposition. There's ...
May 4, 2014 -
Re: Vampiric: Book Two, Chapter One
Heya, Lucrezia! Apologies for the delay. a tall and wide man with a thick mustache and candlestick. This guy? Or the priest? I'm going nuts trying to pinpoint Dracula. O_O ...
May 3, 2014 -
Re: The Perfect Thief Chapter 2
Heya, Gaurav! Blown away, as expected. And this sentence ... The road to my orphanage was long and tacky, just like my own fate. Just gorgeous. I'm a sucker for ...
Apr 28, 2014 -
Re: Diakrino- The darkness within (Chapter 3)
Heya, Gaurav! Happy Review Day! :D The poem. It tugged my heartstrings so hard, I think they snapped. I can't ... wow. Just beautiful. And the repetition of "sometime" didn't ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: The Last Breath of Fire, Chapter 3
Heya, Zontafer! Go Blue! :D How can I review now? Laure covered everything I wanted to say, and more. :D The exposition's fleshing out beautifully. Setting, solid. Characters, just so. ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: The Hybrids (Chapter 7)
Back again! Apologies it took me so long. We all take off running. We run out the door and jump into his Jeep. Sensed some redundancy. Both sentences inform the ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: The Musical Confrontation and the Decision [3] (Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
Heya, Deanie! Last part available? And last part 'til the last part?! :smt010 I'm going to beg you to insert an epilogue. Seriously, I will beg you. I'd be satisfied ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: The Musical Confrontation and the Decision [2] (Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
Back again! Go Blue! Wait a second. How did I not notice this before? The title. GoldFlame, the title! The Musical Confrontation and The Decision. So Maria's going to face ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: The Musical Confrontation and the Decision [1] [Twelve Days Before Christmas 11] *Edited*
Back again! Go Blue! Sixteenth part already? Wow, I'm into this. Didn't even notice I was reading until I dragged my eyes away. (Yes, there are moments where I cannot ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: The Leaping, Black-Clad Lords and the Portal [2] (Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
Heya, Deanie! Happy Review Day! From the ladies to the lords. I adored this. And I'm sorry, my Doctor Who mood hasn't passed, so I'm going to have to connect ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: They Call Me a Writer
Heya, Cesare! Happy Review Day! I love reading your pieces. They always hold me spell-bound. Especially the style demonstrated--a priceless fusion of poetry and prose. My favorite line? I can't ...
Apr 27, 2014 -
Re: Vampiric; Bonus Ending
WHY DID YOU NOT PM ME? I am not rating this a review. I am simply here to tell you that this was the best chapter yet. Yes, I know ...
Apr 25, 2014 -
Re: The Leaping, Black-Clad Lords and the Portal [1] (Twelve Days Before Christmas) *Edited*
Hey, Deanie! So amazing, the twist woven through this. I know your target audience's nine-to-ten-year-olds, but the vocabulary and imagery—agh, so sophisticated! And the twist, as I just mentioned .
Apr 22, 2014