Ginara

Very nice! I like this! You have such a captivating writing style. It seemed a little sinister throughout the first bit and NOVA definitely seemed like a villain, even still ...

Wow, this is really fantastic! This first chapter was great for grabbing the readers’ attention. I actually really like how it’s very descriptive about the exact moment throughout but not ...

I like the description and how you are using multiple senses to give us a good idea of the scene (i.e. hearing and seeing). Perhaps you could play off this ...