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  • Romantic Novels Re: Trampling On Your Own Dreams

    A bit reminiscent of a hagiography. On ANOTHER note, this prologue is neither gripping nor poignant--in fact, its telling us that we 'will' cry, and 'want to help me' actually ...

    Aug 21, 2010
  • Poetry Discussion Re: Is It Wrong?

    Mainly I think that it depends on how well-formed the piece is in your mind before you write. If, in a sudden bout of inspiration, the idea justs come to ...

    Aug 21, 2010
  • Poetry Discussion Re: Is It Wrong?

    Mainly I think that it depends on how well-formed the piece is in your mind before you write. If, in a sudden bout of inspiration, the idea justs come to ...

    Aug 21, 2010
  • Poetry Discussion Re: Is It Wrong?

    Mainly I think that it depends on how well-formed the piece is in your mind before you write. If, in a sudden bout of inspiration, the idea justs come to ...

    Aug 21, 2010
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Before I Forget

    I need you to know, when the sun's eye brazens the treetops at the right angle, or when the too-white moon gapes in mourning at all beneath her that decays, ...

    Aug 21, 2010
  • General Fiction Novels Re: A Halted Heart, Prologue

    Motes of dust cloud the bottom of the bed, choking me as I pant the old air frenziedly. The grains in the wood are carving reddened murals into my skin ...

    Jul 3, 2010
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Rise

    Rise Sunflower, rise To the sun of longing, rise From the weary, listless earth, rise In your heart and soul, and embrace the warmth of June. Sister, rise To your ...

    Jul 3, 2010
  • Other Poetry Re: Saccharine

    Saccharine Honeyed words, slipping off a sugary tongue Amber, syrupy syllables gloss the air into a nebulous sheen. Ephemeral thoughts are branded everlasting, Illusions of grandeur crystallized in ma

    Jun 29, 2010
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Our One Duet

    Our One Duet If we were to have our one duet, The only song to sing together, let it be That we draw breaths on the same beat, That we ...

    Jun 29, 2010
  • Narrative Poetry Re: The Struggle of the Orchid

    The Struggle of the Orchid In a fortress of shoots, leaves, and amethyst, Far away from the deceit of night and the torch of sun, The orchid is conceived. Curling ...

    Jun 20, 2010
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Viscous Memories

    Viscous Memories When we first met, I did not see your face. Like an incensed mutt barking at the moon, streaks of wanton fire—flickering fingers harassing midnight’s hazy zephyrs—rose to ...

    Jun 20, 2010
  • Other Poetry Re: Vestiges

    Retrodisco666, Yes, the ending is meant to be abrupt-- as if the whole entirety of the poem was more of a solemn burst of revelation to the narrator--and it is ...

    Jun 17, 2010
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Pin Your Regrets to the Earth

    Thank you very much!

    Jun 17, 2010
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Pin Your Regrets to the Earth

    Pin Your Regrets to the Earth This cemetery is a land of giants: Erudite oaks towering above, cooling the blunt tombs planted in the grass, markers the size of moon ...

    Jun 17, 2010
  • Other Poetry Re: Vestiges

    Vestiges These nights are alone, hiding beneath the floor in a midnight’s cobweb with only a monitor’s light, dreaming of successes and contemplating failures.

    Jun 17, 2010


worlds buzz over us like bees, / we be splendid in new bones.
— Lucille Clifton