GibsonGirl

First of all, it's never the readers fault if they don't get something out of a poem.It's the writers job to make their work mean something to people. Second, I ...

Sorry I don't have as much to say as others, but I don't have much experience with fiction. I like this a lot. It's creepy in the same way as ...

I really like this too. It makes you think about society in general, and it's cool how you got your point across in a story this short. [/quote]

I agree with what other people have said here. It's good, there's really nothing for me to pick out other than the line where you say something about crying out ...

I agree, you should put more space between your paragraphs to make it easier on the eyes. The accent was a little weird, you could try to show it as ...

I like this, probably because it's easy to relate to. You might want to separate it into stanzas to make it easier to read. Also, I've lost who I am. ...

SlickJimmy, I don't really know what to say about this. Most of the rhyming is forced and none of it really makes sense. And if so not, then for shame ...

Wow, I really don't know why there are no other posts on this. It's really good. I know this isn't very constructive, but there's nothing I would change. Good job.

I don't know as much about poetry as backgroudbob, but I also thought it didn't flow well. When I read it to myself it seemed slightly off. I don't have ...

I like your work. The first one is good from what I can see, but it's a little big and hard to see the whole thing at once. The second ...

Mag! UPDATE NOW! I'm dying here! It's awesome, btw. I love Sirius...mostly 'cuz he's hot. Hehe. Is he actually gay?

I agree with Maggie, the Druid rhyme was a little forced and didn't seem to fit the theme of the song. You could try changing it, even if it doesn't ...

Just a song I wrote, untitled so far. If you have any ideas, speak up. [Verse One] You've gotten pissed and said too much You've tried to quit when things ...

Magggggg Don't doubt your drawing skills! You are really good! I have to say, this particular flower isn't your BEST. That special honor goes to the band mural. :)

i've had enough of this i've had enough of live I don't really understand this part. What does it mean that you've had enough of live? You could try changing ...