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Um OK. seeing as you comment on my stories i thought i would comment on yours! this could be a good piece of writing, but you use certain words too ...

oh my god, i already hate Locke! hes so mean! Why is he mean? I bet that the characters end up going out please write more, and PM me when ...

OK No offence but this was boring. Nothing exciting happened. It was just a really simple conversation between a couple of friends and I don't even get why this girl ...

i think you need to back up your story with something more reliable. Blood tablets? sorry but that doesn't seem very interesting! The whole point of being a vampire is ...

this could be a good story but to me it seems that everything is happening too fast i mean, the readers only just found out that there's this amazing girl ...

well this one was good like the others! write more and let me know when you do please! the only thing I didn't understand was the bit about his father. ...

i love the fact that arnold is going mad! the alarm clock was a good touch- talking to the furniture! i think you could have added more detail about the ...

this was good-there was a lot of action! i liked the way you described the bomb exploding but I was a bit confused by the bomb. I thought Arnold had ...

OK, A few comments about this. First of all-SLOW DOWN! A story like this is meant to be exciting and tense, maybe make you slightly scared because of all the ...

wowweee! didn't know you wrote poetry! (i can tell this is your work though because its so morbid) But i really like this! although i do think the line 'All ...

This is longer, which is good, but I think you are rushing things in the story a bit. When i wrote my first piece all comments said that I needed ...

Ok, this was interesting! A bit short, but I'll read the next chapters! There were a few spelling/grammer mistakes but not many. And how did you think up the name ...

If i offend you with my comment, then sorry because i don't mean to! This was OK- I liked the bit about how Ella couldn't see and Barry couldn't speak, ...

this is really good, very exciting! A few spelling mistakes buts that it as far as nitpicking goes! i haven't read the pieces before yet because I started reading this ...

Hey! Well, I saw this earlier, and now I can see that you've changed it a bit, which is good. But even though I'm your friend, I'm afraid that I'm ...