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  • Poetry » General, Romantic
    Re: Two hearts

    What's up what's up The first thing I thought when I read over this is that' there are some words that aren't essential or could be rephrased. Maybe I'm wrong ...

    Feb 13, 2019

  • Yo! Man I love slam poetry! If you post more slam poems, feel free to post a voice clip, because these poems are made to be spoken not read. Anyway, ...

    Jul 30, 2016

  • Short Story » Satire, Mystery / Suspense
    Re: The Offing

    Yooo, Team Mystic! So I'm just gonna run through this, give my opinions and do a little rap up at the end. him and answers his question. The character hasn't ...

    Jul 30, 2016

  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic
    Re: Sharp Suicide

    Hello! Its very difficult to review this type of poetry, due to the sensitive topic. I feel like I should be walking on eggshells, but I'm gonna try be honest ...

    Jul 18, 2016

  • Poetry » Realistic, Romantic
    Re: Once Upon An August

    Hello! Personally, I see rhyming schemes as a trap. They're really, really ddifficult to do. Because of the rhyming scheme I felt this poem became too 'wordy' in a way. ...

    Jul 2, 2016

  • Short Story » General, Realistic
    Re: Awake

    Hello, So to begin this review I'm gonna talk about some specific elements of the language and mechanics of this piece. Just some typos or comments on particular use of ...

    Jul 1, 2016

  • Short Story » Romantic, Dramatic
    Re: More Than A Dream

    Hello! ^^ I'll be reviewing this for you today. So the first thing I noticed when I was reading this was certain repetitions of words, that were quite close together. ...

    Jun 28, 2014

  • Poetry » Realistic, Lyrical
    Re: Today (or "Walking Out")

    Hello! ^_^ Okay, so after reading this through a couple times, I think your biggest problem here is the rhyming. Rhyming has to be completely on point for it to ...

    Jun 5, 2014

  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Humor
    Re: Placebo Hearts Chapter 3: Reflection.

    Back at it again. ;) Okay, first thing I'm noticing is that nothing is happening in this chapter. I mean, things are happening, but nothing too essential. Most of their ...

    Jun 4, 2014

  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, Humor
    Re: Placebo Hearts Chapter 2: Friends.

    Awww!! This is suucchh a good chapter. I liked it way more than the first! Your description is really good here. Like Bam! Whoa good. It was the perfect amount! ...

    Jun 4, 2014

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: A work in progress

    Hello Hecate. ^_^ So for my review, I'm going to review as I read, then give an overall impression . ^_^ So the first thing I want to comment on ...

    May 30, 2014

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: They Call Me a Writer

    Hey Cesare! I have to point out one thing first, which is the fact that you used your real name in here (err, I think), and your location is on ...

    May 30, 2014

  • Poetry » General, General
    Re: Hiaku-like poem

    Hey Pies! Happy Poetry Exchange (err is that a thing?) First things first, I'm going to rant about the title. Firstly, a haiku is 5/7/5, and by my count, this ...

    May 25, 2014

  • Short Story » Horror, Other
    Re: Wanna Play A Game?

    Hello lost. I had to read this about two times before I understood what was going on. This is a problem because you can never guarantee that someone is going ...

    May 23, 2014

  • Short Story » General, General
    Re: Prolouge: Monochrome Kiss

    Hey! I'm Hightop, and I'm going to review this for you! You know what I thought when I finished reading this? "What a pity, this could have been so much ...

    Apr 16, 2014

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