Galatea

Icaruss isn't wrong, but his post was. I encourage people to speak kindly to each other here, because one nasty sarcastic comment can completely stop a young writer from flourishing.

wiseman... Thank you for the review. The cigarettes I refer to in the poem are called Djarum Black. They are known as "Blacks" in the smoking community. They contain cloves, ...

Draft 2! To address a couple of concerns: Punctuation- I ignored periods on purpose because I wanted the piece to be one long image, not a series of smaller ones. ...

I'm usual... I usually do script formatting like this: BETTSY Blah blah blah blee ( blah blah stage direction blah ) ( blah blah more stage directions blah ) ADAM ...

I'm on as Galatea, as usual. Glad to have you on board!

I don't have much time, and I'll review this more thoroughly but: Never EVER under any circumstances apologize for your writing. Ever. Erotic poetry is just as valid as any ...

I'm with Suzanne on this one. House of Leaves , hands down.

The only thing that confuses me is the moon's 'gender'. You refer to it as 'he', after referring to it as pregnant. Is this intentional?

...controversy is cool. Granted. I think what annoys me most is the after-thought. Maybe it wouldn't bug me so much if it hadn't been written to guilt her friend. I ...

Honey, you can't take critiques personally. I said it makes you come across as ignorant...I never said you were. Bob suggested italicising the Shakespeare lines so you don't get accused ...

Its one of the most disturbing books I've ever read. The film was rated R for a reason. Books are more graphic, by virtue of our imaginations.

18th century. Play write is correct.

Brilliant book. I'd put the age appropriacy line higher, though. more like 17 or 18.

Brilliant. One of my favorites. Nabokov is (was) a synaesthete. His writing really speaks to me.

I agree with Snoinky. Its a little flat. The holocaust was incredibly INCREDIBLY graphic. The things that were done to those poor people are too terrible to gloss over. Do ...