Gaia

Gaia, I don't think this site is the place for you. In fact, based on what I've read of your posts, I can't even figure out why you are here. ...

I believe anyone who thinks "Hell" is a bad word, is a person who's scared of hell. Plus of ever hear of this motto, "I'm an ass, and I'm proud ...

Yep, Gazza is right. What other way t o you expect to improve other than to take a little critism from writers than have maybe more experi a nce than ...

Right, please tell me what the point of you posting your story was if you dont want feedback on how to improve your story and in turn make you a ...

I wasn't intending to be mean, unless you're the type of people, who thinks "Hell", is a bad word. :/ Plus it's hard for me to be nice with the ...

How in the hell do you get that conclusion? It does add to the story. -_-;

What if I don't want to get rid of the prologue? >.>;

Cool story, I found the flashback part the most intresting. Can't wait to read more. :]

I like the story a lot, I always like some sort of fantasy story, although I'm not much of a reader. I'll make sure to read more as it's posted. ...

Captain Hub kneeled down, grabbing a handful of the dirt from the ground and then releasing it. He stood back up and walked towards a guard, he grabbed the guard ...