Fye

It was nice, I would say. :) Not too much of a poem person so I can't critique well here. Nonetheless, your description and imagination gave me the emotion. Felt ...

When you wrote the first contract I did critique as detailed as I could. You barely changed anything. Only a few words, maybe. You wrote so many more up to ...

Oh my, my name is a planet. Fye. Haha. Anyway, for a prologue it was okay, not bad but not wonderful either(maybe it's my taste.. Hmm.. I BET you it's ...

The chapters are short indeed! I read through all 3 chapters before I could think of a critique. But other than that, it's a nice story so far! However at ...

Thanks, Meev! Yeah, I was having a fear that there would be certain parts where I would be doing assumptions but people won't see it as I do. So that's ...

I closed my eyes – the nightmare still haunted me. Beads of sweat trickled from my head down to my back as I sat upon my austere bed. I looked ...

I agree with MadHatter this was better than the 1st contract. Just a few notes to go through: 1. Watch the tenses in the 2nd paragraph. It's past tense, no? ...

Oh. Well, like most people I have no feeling of God whatsoever. I live in my characters. I feel what they feel. So writing makes me feel.. what my characters ...

I agree with Kyte. Breaking up the paragraphs would help a lot! It was an interesting story. The beginning was rather dull for me, though. There was nothing to keep ...

This man was 42 years old and lived with no one except his dear old dog. That will soon change. I entered his room and saw him watching TV on ...

Times Square is busy during the lunch rush. Everyone knows that, so why did I go through here to visit my target? I could have taken the alleyway to the ...

I just registered cause this site looks active and interesting so I thought I'd try it out. You can call me.. er, someone give me a nickname. Cause I can't ...