Fye

"Daddy, come here and see!" "What is it now?" His voice was agitated; slightly raised. He would've shouted, but he suppressed his anger. Still, my heart could sense it; the ...

Hmm...I won't go to any grammar details or anything of the like since you might be rewriting this. I haven't read your novel, but I understand what you mean by ...

Punctuation inserted. Can anyone correct me if I'm wrong, please? Thanks a lot! Fye

Edited. Hoping for crits. Please and thank you!

Hmm...Without thinking of the word "school", I would go for 1. Music 2. English 3. Math But with "school" in mind, I'll have to go for math. Music is not ...

Hey, Fan! Soo sorry I took so long. But here's my promised crit! :) Lightning tore across the star studded sky and the rain battered Kyvor relentlessly as he struggled ...

Very sorry for late replies everyone. I've got an idea. How bout each stone have its own guardian who can use the powers in their stones alone. And when the ...

(oops, is everyone gone already?) Fye sat on the cold but ornate tiled hallway floor. Her mind was occupied, nosing in the room behind her. It was something new. No, ...

The smell of the blood covering his back and pooling on the cell floor around him was making him nauseous. The pain had numbed the nerves in his back, etc. ...

Hey selena, nice to have you on YWS. :) Something I have to tell you: you should review before you post your work. I see you have 7 posts and ...

It's a short prologue so I've posted the first half of chapter 1 as well. Enjoy! ____ Prologue The typewriter was set up. She fixed in a blank sheet of ...

The discovered angel did not sit down with the priestess. She only watched her with her eyes closed...wanting to figure out by herself what she was doing. "You're sensing something." ...

Oops, one more thing. With "bastard" in there it probably shouldn't be rated G. ;) Just a thought.

Ah, lovely. That's the word! Lovely. :D A young brown - haired boy was deep in an embrace with the girl he loved. Although two years distanced Kel from the ...

*echoes everyone* Yep, Nate, it's really nice. The website title is kinda hard to read in the banner, though; at the parts where it's just black outline but no white ...