Futuristic

Shouldn't it be 'when the first thing he saw'? Not sure, but first things just doesn't sound quite right to me. Ah, could be. Does sound better. I may have ...

Well, I could use more reviews for if you don't mind. Am working on Chap. Two, but want to make sure Chap. One is straight before I post the next ...

Guess, I'll give this a try . . . If you review The Land of Spirits (Chap. One) I will give you . . . *rummages through desk drawer* The ...

Ha, great! Thanks! Were mistakes that I should've seen myself, but must have overlooked a dozen times. Really was helpful, and as always, appreciated. Will edit those fixes in, and ...

Okay, this is the first story/chapter I've posted since joining. I've spent a couple days reading it over and trying to make improvements, but I feel I've reached the limit ...

Also, you should really add some details to the characters. I didn't know the MC was a girl until I read the author's note at the end. Was wondering why ...

Hey, just a couple things from me right now: School's over, and I look over to where Mom used to be at every day after school. Can that be rewritten? ...

Okay, first of all, just wanted to say that this is an amazing story idea. Am super jealous now because I wish I'd thought of it :). I love what ...

Hey BookGirl, first of all, wanted to say how much I like your story so far, and especially the "Elemental Heroes" aspect of it mentioned in the preview. I'm really ...

Hey YWS, I'm Futuristic. Joined yesterday, and have been checking out the site ever since. So far, seems cool, and I look forward to getting more into it. Seems like ...