FutureFamousWriter

Love it as always! i love the playfulness in the characters and Ela determination. Send me the next chapter as soon as possible! i want to find out who gets ...

i'm sorry to say this but your intro is full of mistakes. Some are: “when I looked around the room and he wasnt their!”- Its THERE. “ " hmm more ...

i'm hooked! what a great prologue! my prologue for one of my stories is really short too, so don't worry too much about how short it is. i'll post it ...

Chapter1 I was going to get punched in the face. He came at me with all the strength and speed he could master. I actually felt sorry for the guy ...

good, here are some quotes to keep you motivated! “Be yourself. Above all, let who you are, what you are, what you believe, shine through every sentence you write, every ...

really good! well, creepy but good. here are some good quotes that are related to death: “If death meant just leaving the stage long enough to change costume and come ...

good, only one mistake i could find: %u201CWhy do she like him better than me?%u201D its why DOES she like in better than me. Unless you are trying to sound ...

I LOVE THIS STORY!!!!!! the imagination behind it is truly brilliant! however, there are a couple of things you need to fix up: “I felt suddenly naked without him well, ...

With the bit that says “That’s it I won't tell him and everything will go on just fine” I think you should add a ! or a , because when ...

CHAPTER 1: The Strange Reading It wasn’t the first time Fay Williams had been late for an appointment at The Psychology Clinic for Distresses Teens. In fact, she was always ...

Love the tension, love the language, love how you hit readers with the cold heart truth. The way you hit readers with the realisation that things like this really do ...

CHAPTER 6 Vince didn’t glance, let alone talk to me, all the way back to the cave. We went in and Maylee’s phone rang. She answered it with a hello ...

I do not want to be a pain or anything, but the last sentence " I drifted to sleep" is so old and used its not funny. I know personally ...

CHAPTER 1 LISA I paced back and forth in the cold basement of my family’s house, a tattered book in my left hand and a translucent bottle of what looked ...

Awsome! i first joined up today and decided to read one of someone elses chapter before posting mine and yours was the first. I LOVE the ending sentence. It leaves ...