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  • Archive Re: Character How-do-you-dos

    Hey guys! Sadly, Ben got into a car accident and has passed. I'm John and I want you all to know his dad is back and all is well other ...

    Oct 9, 2012
  • Action/Adventure Novels Re: Project Overkill: Chapter One (start of-)

    I walked around, putting my gun in the air and shooting repeatedly. People scattered, running towards the store shelves to hide. “Nobody move!” I bellowed, shooting again for emphasis. My ...

    Oct 8, 2011
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: The Last Job - Short Story

    Great story! The plot makes sense and the characters are down-to-earth. I didn't see very many mistakes if any. Some sentances are confusing, like: The sun is still pouring over ...

    Oct 8, 2011
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: How to Build a Fire Dialogue

    I waited, looking at the fire-provider playing with sticks, poking the fire, “What 'r ya doing! Stop playing with the fire! Yeah, dropping them on the ground is going to ...

    Oct 6, 2011
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: Triple Homicide

    I really enjoyed the story, though the part where the main character went cannibal was kind of creepy. There was a lot of errors in the story, like capitalization was ...

    Aug 25, 2011
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Out With Magic

    This story is very well written, with little to no mistakes that i saw. The plot line plays out very well and the descriptions are spectacular. The way the setting ...

    Aug 7, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Caylee

    I think your poem is heart warming. I didn't see any mistakes which shows how much time you put in this poem (along with the poem itself of course). I ...

    Jul 20, 2011
  • Welcome Mat Re: New and Lost

    Hello ZeroKelvin! I'm FutureAstronaut and I'm semi-new here but I know a lot of how and what to do here at YWS so if you are ever in need of ...

    Jul 20, 2011
  • Romantic Short Stories Re: Your My True Love

    I thought the story was cute and had a plot line, BUT: 1: Capitalization. It was overlooked in a lot of places, such as at the beginning of sentences. You ...

    Jul 20, 2011
  • Science-Fiction Short Stories Re: Zombie.0

    This is part of the prolouge, all I have done so far

    Jul 20, 2011
  • Science-Fiction Short Stories Re: Zombie.0

    The zombie walked up, his clothes ripped and detaching from his body. Drake looked up, staring into the creature's eyes. Finally, he got a good look at them. He looked ...

    Jul 20, 2011
  • Archive Re: Character How-do-you-dos

    Hi fellow characters! I'm Benjamin Garjone, and I would like to know who you are. I'm from the story Take Wing, which was created by Christopher and I would enjoy ...

    Jul 20, 2011
  • Welcome Mat Re: Hello Everyone!

    Thank you SubjectBlue for that. I will make sure to PM if I need help. Can you spread the news that I'm here and to review my work.

    Jul 19, 2011
  • Welcome Mat Re: Hello Everyone!

    Hello YWS! I am new to the site and haven't been writing for too long. I'm Christopher or FutureAstronaut. Call me Chris, or anything that has to do with Christopher ...

    Jul 19, 2011
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: My nightmare of a life

    This story was exactly what a scary book should be, scary. I was confused on what happened when he smashed his nose. I think that he fell through a window ...

    Jul 19, 2011


For a short space of time I remained at the window watching the pallid lightnings that played above Mont Blanc and listening to the rushing of the Arve, which pursued its noise way beneath. The same lulling sounds acted as a lullaby to my too keen sensations; when I placed my head upon my pillow, sleep crept over me; I felt it as it came and blessed the giver of oblivion.
— Mary Shelley, Frankenstein