Frosty

Hello! I loved the passion you put into this story, and this story sounds exactly like something that could've happened durring the war. I think it is very well writen ...

Hey there! This was a great read for me, and was very well writen. This story I think kind of speaks the truth if a nuclear war would ever break ...

Hey there, I love were you are taking this story. You have great details, naration, and dialouge. Can't wait to read part two of this story, keep writing.

You have a good concept for this story right now, you do have some things you can improvement, but it would seem like Lava, yllufituaebroken and denj pointed out your ...

This was a great read, you took your time and wrote this out thinking of almost every word, this is again was a great read. Keep writing.

I am not really all knowing in the writing of poetry, but this poem to me seems to speak the truth to life. Keep writing.

Ok I think I got what you guys are saying, please re-read it for me and tell me if I'm heading in the right direction.

Ok I've revised it somewhat, please tell me if I was going in the right direction.

Thanks for the review, and the helpful tips. I will try my best to try and improve my writing skills.