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Oh, this is interesting. the greater part has been corrected already so thats good. What is up with the mother anyway? Ican't ait to read the next chapter.

Wow, great story. it sounds so sad and yet genuine. Do you mind telling me why her mum kicked her out or is it in the next chapter.

Ok, only one person reviewd this so I've jumped onto it. It was quite impressive for a prologue, as stolen hearts mentioned you are a wonder ful writer. I can't ...

So I don't ussually read stories like these so there is no need to be harsh, it was quite interesting the description you gave I mean. But what is it ...

C'est bon

I liked it personally, I started reading it and I got gripped onto it. People are now going to compare peopel meeting at school as Twilight!! A love stroy is ...

Hey Everyone, I've joined this site for I think more than 6 days now and I never got the chance to introduce myself. :( Anyway I have now and I ...

well that is better if is one big joke. i would totally make a joke out it as well. Any way more hilarious than the first one.

What the hell!!! i DISAGREE, THE REPITITION IS TOO MUCH, i MEAN TO ME PERSONALLY. IN GENERAL PEOPLE WANT TO READ AN INTERSTING STORY, REPITITION JUST MADE ME BORED. ANYONE ...

Ok, I will try to make this sound less harsher. You've done very well in bringing the characters to life especially with the mouse and I'll totally let you of ...

Nice work!! Inform me when you mange to publish your story. But I've got a few questions to ask, is any of the characters based on you or any one ...

Wow, another brilliant story once again!! Good job on describing your characters, I spotted something you said about a preface. Where is it? Anyway, I don't really comment kindly since ...

Hey, I loved it actually but I agree with the above reader about some stanza's been unneccessary. I know how hard lyrical writing is cos I've tried it before but ...

I can't believe it!! It was well done!! That could totally be made into a book. Hey could you write more? i'VE BEEN TRYING TO LOOK FOR HARRY POTTER FAN ...

I totally agree with everyone. it sounds like a good story but since it is dialogue every speaker's suppose to start a new sentence. maybe you could re type it ...