Freakette

Wow. That was pretty powerful. Great job, it really draws the reader in. I loved the language here, and it sparks a bit of sadness for the main character. Good ...

Twit, thanks for the criticism. I was worrying about if the speech seemed too modern or unrealistic... However, the sketches of the man and Kendell Inkcrest were supposed to be ...

thanks, it means a lot. :D I'll post more soon.

I like the names of the characters, they're interesting. xD But the grammar and phrasing is rather weak... Either way, it sounds like an interesting story idea, but it would ...

I really like Loki's character, he's very well developed. Another great chapter, this idea is very fascinating. :D

Wow :D This was a great first chapter. I loved your language and I loved the background you set for Loki. (I'm evil, I like dark pasts... Haha.) Your grammar ...

I do enjoy this story's plot, there's a sense of mystery here that easily catches the reader. c: However, the grammar was a bit off and the sentence structure was ...

"Oh, Annabelle!" I swirled around, my white dress belling out around me and falling back into place. My white hair, flowing down in soft waves, quickly mimicked my dress. I ...