Freakette

Ooh, Audy, thank you for the long review, there are some really good point, but these characters aren't in Europe, and it's 1886, the year the very first prototype recipe ...

Aw, it's cute and sad. The character description for Flora is wonderful, it made me smile. The detail is excellent, perhaps a smidgen overwhelming at times, but regardless, it brings ...

Hmm, this is the first chapter I've read, but it's still very easy to follow, good job. The writing isn't too descriptive, but not bland, a nice medium, it's easy ...

This is your first poem? Wow. It's better than anything I could write in terms of poetry. I really love the message I'm getting from this, too. It's really well ...

Thanks Madi and LindsayG. Glad to know it's not too rigid or anything. I was kind of worrying about if it was too robotic... And LindsayG, I'll take that paragraph-splitting ...

Sorry for not updating for a while, I was having a bit of a hard time deciding where I wanted to go with this. I've never written this much of ...

Hahaha, I liked this. The poor guy, though. Loved the interaction between him and the cop, lol. xD It's a pretty cute beginning to a story, really casual and entertaining, ...

Oh, I love this. It's simple, but it stays interesting enough to keep the reader hooked. Great language, great grammar, not really anything I can find wrong with this. Character ...

Interesting. I like how you took a beginning that sounded like a generic vampire/werewolf story, and spun it into something else. I was thinking werewolves, but I like this better. ...

Thanks, Audy and LindsayG. :D I'm glad you like this so much. Even if there wasn't much criticism, it's still great to know what you think about it. I'll be ...

Well, the plot I'm getting from this is nice, but the other comments are right, you need paragraphs. It's a bit hard to read properly with all these sandwiched bits ...

This almost seems like it's about you... But my goodness, the grammar here, it makes everything rather unclear. I agree with the above comments, you should try studying the styles ...

Awwww yeaaaahhh, chapter's got its own post. xD Thanks for the feedback so far, comment on this please? :D ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Somethi

This is a very captivating story. I like the plot so far and the language is good, but perhaps a bit over-descriptive? The grass was pressed down where I had ...

This is really good, I like the language a lot, it flows easily. Also, the plot is interesting. It makes me wonder what Aaron may be thinking later on in ...