Formslipper

I read your review, and you gave me a lot to think about. All of your suggestions are great, so I'll take them. Instead of Jonah falling for her now, ...

Holy crud, that's long! Really, you don't have to read it if you don't want to. I'll eventually find a way to split this up.

@Jellybean, Meh... Maybe I'll just nix that whole dialogue, or make Jonah ponder over it. I really want this to be realistic and for Jonah to resent his wealthy status ...

I read all of what you said. Thank you so much for the review! All these edits are really great, and I love your comments on the pace (i.e.- too ...

I read it. You must know, I'm scathingly honest. Is there a "Soliloquy" section to put this in? Where's the characters, the conflict, the setting? Why is this popular?

Definitely not footnotes! It'll be hard to incorporate explanations of diabetic terms into your text, but if you do it, people will understand it better. Ooh! Suggestion. What if you ...

Haha, it's decent content then! Angel being thrown out of heaven- I liked it. Did you read my review and look over the changes I made? If you learn to ...

What's with your " Uh ok^^^ " ridicule? Don't you respect my opinion? Soulkana, I took my time to read what you wrote, and I carefully thought through a good ...