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Thanks for reviewing! All suggestions are welcome! This definately helps me. *~*Foreseer*~*

I thought this was brilliant! When I was reading it it sounded so... deep and serene. Good descriptions and use of words, really captivating. I really liked the whole poem. ...

I remember this book, I think I read it last year. I didn't think it was gonna be that good, but I glad I was wrong. After I read this ...

This was good!! There was emotion and description and it was great! Very sad, though. It was simple and good. I hope there's more. *Foreseer*

Well, I really like this. It displays emotion, and everything really well. Props for that! Maybe if there could be a space in between paragraphs, but hey it's good. Can't ...

Interesting chapter 1, a few little errors but good start. Maybe arrange some sentences a little differently or add some more details. Definately looking forward to what happens next.

Well, it is a good book, but yeah it may be missing just a little something. Oh, well, I liked it anyway. :wink: The movie, from what my sister told ...

Well here it is Chapter 2. Chapter 2 While Bella talked joyfully with Mathew, I slipped out of the kitchen and went outside. I caught a glimpse of Javier slipping ...

Thanks a lot you guys, like I said I really appreciate it. I did look back and see the errors, thanks for pointing them out. Also, I reviewed it again ...

Alright, thanks for reading. I really appreaciate it.

Definately a beginning chapter. Good way to introduce characters. I feel this sets the ground for the rest of the story. Maybe you could put a little something more memorable, ...

Really liked the introduction, could use a little more discription but it's good. I like the way the intro is going so I can't wait for what's coming next. I'm ...

Interesting....but good. I had just a little bit of trouble following who was telling the story, though. Like what you put in the introduction, setting the ground for the next ...

Wow! Got me hooked with the first sentence. I am really looking forward to reading more! I don't know, but something caught my attention. I mean, some parts I was ...

First I shall say...interesting introduction. I liked it, it grabbed my attention, would very much like to see what happens next. Like Riedawriter23 said, editing is your friend. I think ...