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Re: The Cruelty of the World
Glaring at me with those eyes? Is this meant to be a question if so it doesn't make much sense, maybe it would be better as 'Glaring at me with ...
Dec 10, 2009 -
Re: endings
Days pass, time grows old. He sits there, a beard accumulating at his chin. Soup’s gone cold on the table, toast burnt beyond recognition. Life goes on. Not for him ...
Jul 4, 2009 -
Re: This Stupid Crush
usually I don't like poems about crushes and loves. But I like this poem. I'm not sure about the title it's a bit to blunt I think it needs to ...
Jul 4, 2009 -
Re: And she swears...
I liked it, it has a 'vibe' about that when you read it you feel like your watching this girl's life die. One question (a silly on really) any way ...
Jul 4, 2009 -
Re: A Bridge of Colors
I personally like the first poem better, it paints a picture and gives an image in your mind. the second version is choppy, it doesn't flow like the first version. ...
Jul 4, 2009 -
Re: Nerdy Obsession
Good job setting the scene, it hooks the reader in right at the start. The good thing about is it's realistic. A few spelling mistakes and tell us more about ...
May 3, 2009 -
Re: Space Dreaming
Cool. Thanks for the advise, I'll keep that number thing in mind.
May 2, 2009 -
Re: Space Dreaming
Space Dreaming Through a telescope, I see me, Falling through a black hole. Time’s stopped. Glinting in space, with a robot suit on. A flag on a moon made out ...
May 2, 2009 -
Re: What if...?
Okay the repitiveness is good some people can over do it but your is in lttle bit size chunks I like that. But the poem becomes a tad preachy. i ...
May 2, 2009 -
Re: King of False Destruction
It was interesting, the title's good. But there is something about which makes you wonder if the writer's got some hidden meaning to it. So instead of enjoying the good ...
May 2, 2009
