Feardser

Hey - thanks for the comments, I forgot to mention at the start that it is part of a longer piece!! :) My mistake ha ha :) It's meant to ...

I accept any and all criticism, but please bare in mind that this is incredibly personal to me, and so content/context will not be changed! :) He sat in the ...

I can see exactly what you mean! The next part of this chapter, 1.2, has a more fast-paced part to it, and this did originally have a captivating start-point, which ...

Note - I'm not too sure about the end part of this section!! :) The room was dark, no light penetrating it’s gloomy recesses as he walked in. Nothing stirred. ...

As soon as I saw the "slammed the door open " I cringed!! I can't believe I missed that!! :) I've got the next part ready now, so I'll post ...

Be kind - completely spur-of-the-moment, so it's probably not too good, and it may not seem to have any meaning!! The leaves drift about on the floor, beneath my open ...

Hi :) Sounds like some really good ideas here - especially the different types of games! (not to be too sadistic on my part!! :) ) The first thing that ...

Thanks for the feed back - I can see exactly what you mean, I have been considering altering the over-descriptive sections, but I thought it was best to post it ...

Hi - this is the first section, of the first chapter, of a novel I've been working on for about a year and a half, on and off - it's ...

Hi- Feardser here, I loved this poem! Absolutely fantastic - especially how both character's lives are so intertwined, so similar, yet they know nothing about one another. It's brilliant how ...

Hey, I have recently joined the YWS, and I have to mention the incredibly warm welcome I have recieved - thank you very much! I am very interested in Creative ...