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Re: Alpha - 2
This part was great. Though I had some corrections to recommend at the 'tears entering her eyes' part. It would sound better if you use 'tears filled her eyes' or ...
Jun 11, 2018
This part was great. Though I had some corrections to recommend at the 'tears entering her eyes' part. It would sound better if you use 'tears filled her eyes' or ...
Jun 11, 2018