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Hmm... Have you ever read Watership down? You could write a story in that style, not as long of course :P If your doing pets specifically, a lot of the ...

Ok. So, thanks for the two responses so far. Quote: Immediately I am attentive, for this is an offense to me. Quote: I glance at the woman, who quite handily ...

Ok, here is the present version of the poem, with some notes on your comments. The Day All the Roses Died One day all the roses died. Not all at ...

A Burning Cigarette / I have judged The train grinds to a halt at the station. I look out the window, watching the people. A woman steps to the door, ...

I admit that I'm not exactly sure what this poem is describing, though it is intriguing. I just want to check, is git the right word in the fourth line? ...

A short poem. First just a minor typo, I'm pretty sure you meant to write taught instead of thought. The impression I get from this poem is that someone has ...

You seem to use fullstops nearly all of the time you should try useing commas or semi - colons, this would give a better effect to you're writing I think ...

Hi everyone, There are many, many comments to analyze here, and tomorrow or Monday I am going to try to do some editing. Thank you for all the responses again, ...

Hmm, I won't address the rest of the comments you made immediately because its late, I just wanted to address the last one. When I wrote this poem, I felt ...

Foundation: False One day came a change, One day, something strange. A little fact of life went wrong, A little fact, but its grip was strong. A certainty that I ...

Thanks for the feedback and the welcome. :) Just some comments and changes on the poem. One day all the roses died, Not all at once, just a few at ...

NOTE: Go to the end of the thread for the most recent version of this poem. The Day all the Roses Died One day all the roses died. Not all ...

Hmm. This is a sad poem :( The girl appears happy on the outside but really shes struggling within herself contemplating suicide? The people are her and her inner mind? ...

Hi Yoha (Ellen?), I know exactly what your talking about in this poem, I think some of the same thoughts every time I'm on the bus with forty so strangers. ...

Hi, I'm Ryan, No questions as of yet, so... hi :D