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Cool. I like it. I'm not exactly sure what it means, but then, its poetry. :) Just a note, keep the number of people the same. At the very end ...

I'm now pretending I don't know starbucks cups are not made with Styrofoam. Thanks for your comments Dream and Lemon. My sense is the poem is pretty good as is, ...

Hi Megan, I appreciate the sentiment of the poem, but I would suggest some changes. The main thing I note is that the poem is divided into six line stanzas, ...

Thanks Jasmine, glad that you liked it. I agree on the one line, and changing it let me fit in a line I hadn't space for before.

Starbucks Coffee Cups Ryan Workman Three Starbucks coffee cups, sitting beside a concrete wall, One large, one medium, one small. There’s a story in the Styrofoam, In the tidy little ...

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Gold or fold might work, they both can be used several ways. Look at the children pale with cold hands frozen, hearts weary as others pave streets with gold spirits ...

I'm not sure if this is dramatic poetry, but I think its closer to that then Other is, so I'm posting it here. An Old Leather Binder An old leather ...

This is good. :) I'm not going to give grammatical feedback, since that has already been supplied. I was just wondering, from my view of children in bad situations, despite ...

Interesting. I've never read a poem based on a video game before. I'd just note, there is some awkward wording in the poem. For example Ever so gracefully she lands ...

Thank you ^^

That was the quickest reply ever.

Before I start the story, I just want to indicate what specific feedback I am looking for. I want to know if the idea for this story is sound. Does ...

A Test of Metal For all the ordeals of character that might arise, There is not much more telling than the threat of demise For some they are few and ...

Its interesting, the line everyone likes the most is the one I was most concerned about. A Burning Cigarette / I have judged The train grinds to a halt at ...