Explosive_Pen

Becki! No, I was totally not creapily browsing through your portfolio. xD I thought this was amazing, Beckerz. Where water and glass meet My world falls apart Period here. The ...

Oh gosh, pop. xD June stole my thunder and got all the necessary nitpicks. :( The only thing that sort of kind of not really but almost bugs me is ...

Hi there! I stood alone beneath the white tree, the feeling in my chest as nervous as its branches in the wind. The metaphor does not make much sense. Perhaps ...

Twin, dear, I know this is horridly overdue, but hopefully you'll remember these tips for future reference. Grammar was amazing, and no spelling flukes. Flow: I do feel that you ...

Hi there anti-pop. I only have half an hour to review this, so if I don't finish now, I'll come back later, alright? I promise! She knew that voice – ...

Alright, see, I'm all for tolerance. I'm a Catholic, but my best friends are Hindu, atheist, and Protestant. I don't really care if you insult my religion, but I'll say ...

Oh, this is so sweet! An amazing read. I had to reread it a few times to really catch the meaning (but that's good; means I actually enjoyed it enough ...

Hi there! Welcome to YWS. :wink: The Eyes of Night The patter of the mitten feet, Maybe mittened feet? I don't think mitten works with feet, though. Swerving ‘cross the ...

Hi there. Here as requested. :D My skin is dry. I feel it hang off the bones, shedding off my fragile features. I can't breathe. My windpipe... oh, my breath ...

Hey Suzanne. Dumas was better than friends, anyway. I'll bet! I've never read his work, but he's on my super-long list. Right after Dante's Divine Comedy. :D “I'll do it ...

Eek! It's long! xD Ah, well. Length is no matter. Clara smiled, and then pulled the girl up, "Now go take a shower." That second comma should be a period, ...

Yay! Finally, chapter 3! I feel like it's been years. xD She had signed her released papers, talked to the doctors; the whole shebang. That semicolon should be a comma, ...

Here as requested! I always get so intimidated by your poetry. You have this sort of indecipherable, old-time quality ion your writing. I'll break it up. I'll do a line-by-line ...

Hi! Here as requested. I know you asked me to do an overview, but some things were bugging me, so I'll just get those out of the way first, 'kay? ...

Hi there! Yes, now that you mention it, I could go for some string cheese myself. :D You know what I want? I want some string cheese! I'm awfully hungry; ...