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Hi I'm not going to review because I'm on my phone and it's hard to type but I will say this: I am in Scotland our education system is kind ...

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This works a lot better because I can really sense your character's nerves. Also, thanks for giving her a name! It was driving me crazy :) Great improvement!

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Also, I reread it and I really want to apologise to (a) anyone who's ever been in Lorna's position, which includes one of by very best friends and (b) Henry! ...

The way I was going to navigate the last scene means Lorna wouldn't be present. It would therefore either have to be from Henry or Saulus' POV. Which do you ...

Okay, my problem here, is that I need Lorna to believe that Henry is being manipulative without him actually being so. Like, I need her to believe that because he ...

You're welcome :) It was just the interaction with Fade. Suddenly he (Adre) had things in his hands that I didn't know where they came from. I'm sure it'll just ...

Oohh I see now. I was watching a conference where someone asked a question to 'Matt, Karen and Moffat' and he shouts, "I have a first name, you know!" Nope. ...

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Well, that's understandable. My reaction that time I was in one was literally panicpanicpanicpanicpanic falling grabarm thatguy'stall I'mokay panic ;)

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Thank you for this review! I've been having problems with perspective a lot. I read the Michael Grant 'Gone' series and it is one of those things where there are ...

Thank you very much! I've gained LOTS of points from review day so I can afford to split it :)

Ok, that's fine. You're welcome :)