ExOmelas

Hm... the reason I haven't explained how the psychic link works is because I really have no idea at all how it would. It's goofy sci-fi that I do not ...

Oh crap did I not mention she's a wolf? Oops. The last nit-pick I actually think is kind of interesting. Should they be people or animals? There's a word that ...

I'll have a look at those things you've picked up as you go later. I am very very glad you brought up the food chain - explanation will come in ...

Actually maybe that doesn't make any sense. I'll try it out at some point.

Cool, good to know. I'll write the funeral chapter and try it out there.

Okay, I have an idea. is pretty much an interaction solely between Chip and Ochon. Could you take a very quick look at that and tell me if it's the ...

In the earlier incarnation of this chapter, someone mentioned that the bit at the end seemed to have been just tagged on. In order to develop Chip's thoughts in it ...

Awesome :D

Made some changes for 1, 4 and 7 - let me know what you think :)

1. I wrote this a while ago so I can't remember the paragraph off the top of my head so I'll have a look and see what I can do. ...

Okay, cool. A reviewer below has commented about that too. Definitely something I want to work on.

Oh christ, just read that first paragraph again... ugh I forgot how much I changed my mind while writing this story. So much stuff needs updated *slogs through* (they know ...

Thank you :) Good lord I did not realise how many typos this had o.o I'll take a look at this in more detail when I get the chance, so ...

Thanks for the review :) Not entirely sure what you mean by exposition? Is that the same as explanation?

ahhh ok. It's not a huge thing - I'll definitely keep reading and let you know if it does :)