ExOmelas

Hey again, Nit-picks: restaurant wasn't fairly new This seems an odd way to phrase this. I'd expect something like "restaurant wasn't particularly new". It seems odd to point out that ...

Hey again, Nit-picks: Curi did in fact dream last night "last" is a bit weird since it's in third person. It should probably be "that". What made her roll her ...

Hi again! Nit-picks: She quickly jumped off of the creature's back and marched towards me balling up her hands into fists. This is one of those times I mean when ...

Hi again! Nit-picks: Fear allowed me to gain the strength to open my weary eyes. "allowed" seems a bit strange. It's not like Fear is saying "yes matt you can ...

Hi there, here as promised :) Nit-picks first: “Stop mumbling . , ” T t he tall man in front of me said in a deep voice , . ”If ...

Hi again, Nit-picks: It was a wonder why her parents even had such elaborate parties. Their lives could be considered dull, though, between one of her parents being a part-time ...

Hi there, here to get started on some non green room reviews! Was planning to do 3 a day but I was out today so this one will probably be ...

Hey there, I like the aggression in the middle section of this poem. I think that gets across the anger and the fear really well. Taking "dog-eat-dog" to the next ...

Hi there, Nit-picks first: Vault rooms are like vaults but they're spacious and have lots of rooms like someone's apartment a hundred years ago. This is a bit of information ...

Hey Lizz, welcome to my ill-considered attempt to catch Nikayla in the month standings... While I am pleased that you have found a font preferable to YWS's, it means I ...

Hi there, nit-picks/flow first: The fire of longing grows cold and dim within my heart, I think the "within" doesn't quite fit the metre and I'm not sure why it's ...

Hi there, nit-picks first: One of the more interesting logical questions You don't need the word "logical" here. You've established this is about logic. This is, of course, my opinion, ...

Hey there, Nit-picks first: of my life day after day. The flow here is a little bit off because the line before it was so short. The metre is so ...

Hey there, Only the one nit-pick, so well done on that! looks for a place he belongs in That's a little bit clunky. Something like "place where he belongs" or ...

Hello Kay, welcome to part II of today's attempt to review poems I enjoy~ Quick question: Is "intrusive thoughts" a thing? I've heard it used in a context about mental ...