Evi

Hey Voice, Evi here. I think you use the English language very well here. Your sentences are interesting and stimulating, because you've got some imagery and suspense. So, kudos! I ...

This seems like a dream to me-- both the Nook and the Kindle --but I want to wait until both products are around a bit longer. I want to get ...

Haha, yes, I'm extremely excited! Of course, in the spirit of NaNo insanity, I just recently scrapped the plot I've been working on for about a year and essentially started ...

Don't change it! ^^ I like you're name, firstly. Also, if you change it, general chaos and confusion ensues as people have no idea who you are, or where Pgsgirl7 ...

Hey, Evi here! ^^ So, I'm gonna make this short. My paranoia starts creating images in my mind, I kick at the door. This is called a comma-splice. You have ...

I think one could be quite funny, but I can't see that really hitting 50,000 words with just that idea alone. You'll need a good, heavy sub-plot to add some ...

Hey, here as requested. ^^ Sorry for any wait. I agree that the beginning was a bit odd. Too wordy, too legal-sounding. I thought that you're author's-note was continuing there, ...

Yay! =D You joined! ;) Obviously, my username is Evi, nice to (re)meet you. To make a welsome post, though, you might want to head over here: . You can ...

Hey, so. ^^ This was actually quite funny, for less than 250 words. I liked the Disney movie joke, and the woman thinking of her cat. However, beyond that I ...

I did find this helpful. But, are there no negatives to the Collective Villian type? The fact that you have so many more antagonists to characterize would be one, I ...

Everyone's looking wonderful; YWS is obviously chock-ful of beautiful people! I figured I'd drop in and post a picture of me while I was playing around with my laptop's camera, ...

Hey Hammerkid. Evi here. In 2016 a man entered the hotel. I don't think you need to include 2016. It adds a date stamp to your story, which makes it ...

GryphonFledgling's right, there's no hard and fast rule to description. It depends on the author. In action scenes, I generally avoid a lot of "description" and focus more on the ...

You mean third person present tense? I suppose it would by fine, yes, as long as (like Rosey said) you don't lapse into 'She does this' over and over again. ...

Hey Serena, sorry it took me so long to get to this! ^^ I knew where I was at that moment, but I wasn’t sure how I had gotten there. ...